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Enjoy this practice as a stand-alone experience or as the second of an eight-day series inspired by Br. David's appreciation of and experience with haiku.
To make the three lines of a haiku 5, 7, and 5 syllables long is a merely superficial conformity to the Japanese original. What counts is the spirit. ~ Br. David Steindl-Rast
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Shape and structure are often what first come to mind when we think of haiku — which is usually presented in three lines (sometimes in one or two lines) of typically less than 17 syllables. Poet Tom Clausen sees the structure as encouraging us to “express something meaningful in as few words as possible” and inviting us to “maintain a healthy focus and awareness” as we aim to express what is in the heart.
Haiku and calligraphy by Br. David Steindl-Rast
For those of you interested in the purest form of haiku, Tom Clausen offers the following:
The purists believe a haiku should always have a ‘season word’ and should be a short, one breath poem of less than 17 syllables. They are often of the opinion it should be present tense, direct, and not just a sentence….It should not be a statement of an opinion or a soap box to present an argument or a position. It is typically not a type of poetry that uses metaphor.
Today our invitation is to experiment with the basic shape and structure of haiku.
We invite you to close your eyes and take one or two slow, deep breaths. In this place of presence, feel that which is in your heart. You might consider a moment that felt particularly meaningful for you today. Spend some time feeling into this experience then experiment with capturing the moment in a one-breath, direct, present-tense expression. You might play with trying to write in a three-line format, striving to have less than 17 syllables. You might incorporate a season word. You might puzzle over the order and arrangement of your words and lines to arrive at what intuitively works best.
In the remaining days of the practice, we will suggest a specific focus for you to consider as you craft your haiku. For today and all days of the practice, we invite you to choose the degree to which it feels right for you to use the purist form. Checking off all the “criteria” is certainly not a requirement, and we encourage you to find flexibility within the discipline. As Br. David Steindl-Rast encouragingly says, “What counts is the spirit.”
After you have experimented with writing your haiku, we invite you to reflect on your experience in a notebook or in the reflection area below. If you’d like, you may also share your haiku!
Enjoy the full eight-day Exploring Haiku practice.
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Hallelujah trills An avian chorus as a Coral dawn awakens the East
Sleepy eyes open Gratitude swells my heart Another day for Love
I realized I was thinking very literally when I wrote this, as a bit of word play really:
First five only five There are seven more to go Can syllables lie?
But reading yesterday’s words opened my mind to more. So I’ll keep trying!
Everything washed clean bare light begs my eyes to see shimmering, bareness.
Dawn’s gossamer fog Pale, new leaves quiver, turn, shine Silver maple tree!
Six o’clock traffic Two blocks over, morning din Quiet mind, inside
Nesting time is here Irrepressible life is bursting into song
I was inspired to write this haiku from watching the birds collecting nesting materials that I’ve put out for them in a shrub that is itself bursting into leaf and forming flower buds. It gives me such pleasure to have a part in helping them bring forth the next generation that will visit the garden in the future.
feeling loss for that summer I never had to lose loss to be conquered
Kristin… I really felt this ?
Thank you. My first effort ever ..just closed my eyes and asked what I was feeling. I appreciate your feedback.
Hummingbirds humming Announcing springtime is here to renew the earth
Owls hoot back and forth Language of this new day Noise in the quiet
The yang and Yin of the day …
Wisdom women Together these days Deep well beings
tw0 wearing yellow connected with sunshine my heart with your soul
I had a surprise visit yesterday from my 22 mos old grandson…He was wearing yellow….I was wearing yellow. The coincidence was more that just a chance selection of color…I have felt from the first moment I held him that we are deeply connected as I was to my grandfather. I felt sunshine and joy…and today I tried to capture that in a haiku Baby steps in creating haiku…but would like to have this discipline become a instinct with the thought process at a minimal!
I breathe flowingly walking together as one tulips sing along
Evening time a tree’s branches capture the crescent moon.
I have always found it hard to include “season” words since where I live we do not have traditional seasons. Although there are differences that are more subtle. It is a very useful practice to try and use language that is more universal rather than more local which is something for me to really work on.
I have always enjoyed haiku -its crisp use of language appeals to me. I enjoy distilling a moment down to its barest essence.
Thank you for this practice.
Hiding in my Cave What are you doing here? Go out and Stand
Power Passes By Gentle Whisperer Speaks Stand Tall
From Lectio Divina with I Kings 19:11-13
Speaking tranquilly Amid turbulent thrashing Intonates harmony.
The morning news surrounded by noisy, inane seductive advertising is disruptive. The cacophony of mutilated language jars the serenity of the morning. A few words spoken deliberately, honestly, lovingly center my being, shape my attitude, and give form to my spirit. I would be hesitant to dismiss haiku’s form as confining, but I would also allow for modification. God chose one Word to express God’s love, shape and form for us as how we too can express ourselves. We may not be so eloquent, and we need the leeway. Yet, when our written haiku becomes our lived haiku, we present the infinite in a moment of grace. That’s what I will try to implement and integrate today.
brief whiff of coffee a bracing nectar awaits the first sip aahhh morning!
Flames hold off dampness Sun beats back winter’s cold enough to wake TREES
I loved the way the cliff haiku changed the shape of the words, so I tried to imitate it when I formatted my haiku. Alas: this space changed my formatting, but the words “dampness” and “winter’s cold” should be spaced off to the right in each line. I have written haiku which did not match the 5-7-5 count, and it always felt like I was breaking a law (writer’s guilt! lol) so it will be fun to experiment with that again.
The whispering wind sighs and soughs, sweet ones elsewhere all around blossoms
Caressing velvet Communing heart within heart Blessings from my dog
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