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The second of an eight-day practice celebrating National Poetry Month and inspired by Br. David's appreciation of and experience with haiku.
To make the three lines of a haiku 5, 7, and 5 syllables long is a merely superficial conformity to the Japanese original. What counts is the spirit. ~ Br. David Steindl-Rast
Welcome.
Shape and structure are often what first come to mind when we think of haiku — which is usually presented in three lines (sometimes in one or two lines) of typically less than 17 syllables. Poet Tom Clausen sees the structure as encouraging us to “express something meaningful in as few words as possible” and inviting us to “maintain a healthy focus and awareness” as we aim to express what is in the heart.
Haiku and calligraphy by Br. David Steindl-Rast
For those of you interested in the purest form of haiku, Tom Clausen offers the following:
The purists believe a haiku should always have a ‘season word’ and should be a short, one breath poem of less than 17 syllables. They are often of the opinion it should be present tense, direct, and not just a sentence….It should not be a statement of an opinion or a soap box to present an argument or a position. It is typically not a type of poetry that uses metaphor.
Today our invitation is to experiment with the basic shape and structure of haiku.
We invite you to close your eyes and take one or two slow, deep breaths. In this place of presence, feel that which is in your heart. You might consider a moment that felt particularly meaningful for you today. Spend some time feeling into this experience then experiment with capturing the moment in a one-breath, direct, present-tense expression. You might play with trying to write in a three-line format, striving to have less than 17 syllables. You might incorporate a season word. You might puzzle over the order and arrangement of your words and lines to arrive at what intuitively works best.
In the remaining days of the practice, we will suggest a specific focus for you to consider as you craft your haiku. For today and all days of the practice, we invite you to choose the degree to which it feels right for you to use the purist form. Checking off all the “criteria” is certainly not a requirement, and we encourage you to find flexibility within the discipline. As Br. David Steindl-Rast encouragingly says, “What counts is the spirit.”
After you have experimented with writing your haiku, we invite you to reflect on your experience in a notebook or in the reflection area below. If you’d like, you may also share your haiku!
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Crocuses in bloom Daffodils and tulips, too Robins sing : It’s S P R I N G!
April rain pounds the windows. Still too cold to sow seeds.
One more in honor of this lovely Spring day
Birds sing Spring vibrance Five senses respond My heart eases and I smile
Knj 4/12/19
Very lovely. The birds bring us so much solace.
Five-seven-five-ness; safe structure to play within. Who knows what without.
These haikus are being more self-revelatory than I would like!
I am a fan of the 5-7-5 and am also appreciating the opportunity to be more free during this particular practice.
Bound, being stiff, cold, hears a friendly voice: ‘Come out’. Moving, unbound, free! (Lazarus and me)
Green grass Leafless trees Still pond Spring?
A shiny object, Promises of sustenance. The lure slowly bobs.
Tai Chi: Morning aches, pop, snap— I gently sway to rhythm, My mind a feather.
No time? Stop! Breathe deep the minute — Time melts
I liked the freedom from writing sentences.
Dainty white snow drops Purple and cream hellebore Spring in the garden
Cardinals, Robins On branches bare and leafless Singing spring birdsongs
I am who I am You are different from me Together we are one.
Chirp tweet twitter cheep Chirp whistle tweet twitter bird song day begins
Achoo! Quick a tissue Not a spring cold Achoo, achoo, achoo
Better not to sit But walking is so painful How will I get there
my children, they dance, their bodies so free and pure– around and around..
bend,mop,hardwood floors sun glistens on shiny boards upright I give thanks
unopened bud the struggle to get up on this chilly morning
snow patches in the woods pileated drumming announces spring’s arrival
awake in the night wrestling with questions will tulips bring answers?
As you may be able to tell, I am longing for spring. Maybe some day…
All the haiku reflections are wonderful!
Cold, damp and cloudy early Connecticut Spring Forsythia!
Rising sun gently filters through closed curtains. Fling them wide!
I played with something that caught my attention early this morning. I always use the 5-7-5 format so ventured off that path just a little. Surprised to note a little resistance to my strongly engrained pattern. I look forward to playing with 17 in different arrangements.
Rain this morning, Cool air, cozy warm blankets Cherry blossoms alight
Early Spring, chilly – light through curtains suddenly luminous
Reflection on my experience:
It took being attentive and open to complete this haiku. “Early Spring, chilly” readily appeared. The “cars passing by on the road pitted by salt and sand” did not seem to work.
But indeed nature herself stepped in .. as I was beginning to write about the greyness of the day, pale sunlight shimmered and shone luminous through my thin curtains, lifting my spirits.
Rain comes torrents, then spits teasing the tulips to spill the overflow.
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